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Jenny Lynn's avatar

I love this!! It sounded so mystical and magical.

venus faye's avatar

aww, i love you, sweet sister! thanks for being here with me! 🩷✨🩷

David Gross's avatar

My love becomes your sweetest poem. ‘Sweet for the sweets.’

venus faye's avatar

thank you, david! your support is always so appreciated! 🥰

Sam Oldman's avatar

Love the echo, very beautiful Venus.

venus faye's avatar

yeah, i had fun with that this time. thanks for all your support! 🩷

Billy Egge's avatar

Its a celebration and indulgence.

venus faye's avatar

indeed. thanks so much for being here to read and leave a comment! i really appreciate it. 🥰

Dani's avatar

There’s something powerful about describing becoming as sweetness instead of struggle. It shifts the tone of growth entirely.

venus faye's avatar

i suppose so. both exists as part of growth, but the sweetness is divine. embodiment is such a blessing.

Aaliya's avatar

Your words paint a beautiful picture of love, filled with vivid imagery and emotion. It’s a delightful and enchanting expression.

venus faye's avatar

thank you, sweet girl. self love is the way to inner freedom. 🩷

Aaliya's avatar

Absolutely ♥️

Adrião Pereira da Cunha's avatar

The poem feels like someone waking up to their own desire in a way that’s soft and joyful.

There’s this sense of blooming from the inside, like the body is finally allowed to open.

I love how the imagery is sweet and light bubblegum pink, honeyed wine but still full of confidence.

It treats pleasure as something sacred, not something to hide or feel guilty about.

The lines move like a slow breath, as if the speaker is rediscovering themselves with real tenderness.

There’s a beautiful mix of innocence and boldness, like they’re stepping into their own skin without fear.

The idea of sunrise and sunset happening inside the body is such a gentle way to describe desire.

It’s sensual, but in a way that feels like self‑acceptance rather than performance.

The cathedral image at the end makes the whole thing feel almost holy.

Overall, it reads like a celebration of becoming alive in your own body warm, bright, and unapologetic.

venus faye's avatar

what a beautiful comment. thank you for gracing my work with your eloquent words. 🩷